A Different Slice of Cake

Divinely confectioned as Viola was in a draped-back gown of ivory bridal satin, antagonistic clouds were already gathering on the morning of her impending wedded bliss.   Edgar, precisely attired in a black tailcoat and trousers, mulishly pocket watch dueled over the correct time with his out-of-town best man.  “Good golly,” countered Edgar’s second, his hair sweeping recklessly across his eyes.  “Of what consequence is a minute or two when an entire lifetime with this pip of a gal awaits you!”  Enough time, perhaps, for Viola, noting the rakish angle of Cecil’s finely chiseled jawline, to fancy an entirely different future.

 

The prompt?  Moments.

http://lilliemcferrin.com/five-sentence-fiction-moments/

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10 thoughts on “A Different Slice of Cake

  1. In the picture you’ve created for me, it sounds a wee bit as if Viola is getting a case of cold feet in regards to the marriage to her Price Charming. She definite shows signs of being nervous in facing a totally different life to that she’s become accustomed to living in.

    Has my imagination read too much between the lines of what you’ve written, or have I successful seen the actual picture you had in mind when you wrote this.

    A Happy and Prosperous New Year to you and your family.

  2. Thanks Robin! You got what I was trying to convey here. The grass is looking greener on the other side of the altar for Viola right now. I wonder what might happen in sentence six…

    A Happy and prosperous New Year to you and your family too.

  3. Oooh, I sense trouble ahead! I wonder what Viola will do. Hmmmm. I like Edgar’s line about “this pip of a gal” – totally sounds like something he would say!

    I hope you’re doing well in the new year! Seems like everyone is having a bad winter this year just like the farmer’s almanac predicted. I hope it doesn’t cause too much of a ripple effect for this summer.

  4. Great response to the prompt. This one made me giggle:~) I love how you describe your characters. You make me see them so clearly. This short-short-short had the feeling of “A Room With a View.” Well done.

    Also, happy new year to you:~)

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